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About > The Slush Pile

While working as an editorial intern in children's book publishing in 2002, one of my main duties was to go through "slush" -- unsolicited manuscripts. When I arrived in September, there was a floor-to-ceiling bookshelf crammed full of mail dating back eight months. By the time I left in November, 20 days of work later, there was only a shelf and a half left, less than crammed, dating back "only" three months. I went through armfuls of mail a day.

My supervisors repeatedly apologized that I had to do such grunt work, but it never failed to entertain me. Here are some of my favorite excerpts. All quotes are direct and exact, although I have removed some identifying information (I was actually emailed by author -- er, medium? -- of the first book listed here, back when I had the book title included).

 

I. Cover and Query Letters

 

1)

To whom this may concern

I have channeled a book: [Book Title Here]. In ancient times, a common girl, referred to a girl who took part in spiritual ceremonies. This book has its origins from the Druids of King Arther's time. It is a book of Druid Magic. It shows you how to call your Goddess, Power of you Area, and Archangels, plus many more.

Never mind the poor punctuation and sentence structure; this book wasn't written, it was CHANNELED.

 

2)

I am writing to you to see if you would be interesting in Publishing one of my stories or more. [...] My whole collection of stories adds up to over 85 and one Novel in the works.

Ahh, she wants us to Publish her stories? Cause you know, I get confused.

 

3)

Enclosed is a picture book manuscript of a dog name "Scrappy" and a stamp self address envelop
Yes, good spelling will get you everywhere. Along with properly conjugated verbs.

 

4)

Kate K, a 6th grader from Texas, sent us her first novel along with a photocopy of her last report card. (She had five absences all year and her final grades range from 96 (math) to 99 (health). There's a stamp on it that says "great job / your principal!"). So much love.

 

5)

The story line is based around a female character, Alijah Jacobs, who suddenly comes into the realization that she is not really human. She is genetic impossibility [sic], a combination of a witch and a vampire.
The vampire good&evil manuscripts never cease. (Update, 2011: Considering this was 2002, apparently my slush-senders were ahead of the vampire trend and I missed out on helping my publisher get rich... alas.)

 

6)

My favorite letterhead so far comes from an illustrator. There is a row of different colored dots across the top and below it, "polka dots to make you happy." At the bottom, under another row of brightly colored dots informs me, "buying art brings good luck."

Unfortunately, the story is not so good: a rhyming picture book whose chorus is "Hey there little insect, please calm down / So we can have fun and fool around!"

I have since learned that these are lyrics to a song by Jonathan Richman. Alas, I don't remember whether he submitted this manuscript himself or if someone else was plagiarizing him.

 

 

II. Winning Excerpts

 

1)

Today, is Saturday, oh hi, my name is Billy.
This morning my dad told me that he has a present for me. What could it be.......a skateboard, a new bike, hmmm.
Ah, such a promising beginning.

 

2)

Two pairs of shoes,
Which shoes shall I choose?
They're both rather tasty
But let's not be hasty.

Trying to make picture books rhyme is one of slush senders' biggest downfalls.

 

3)

Kebrina K, "the original psychic to the stars," has written "a coming of age story of sixteen year old Samantha Grayson, a teenage budding psychic."

Of course, the writing is as stellar as the celebrities Kebrina makes predictions for ... Samantha is journaling about her upcoming trip to France:

Kristen is coming and so is Jason. I can't believe we will be stuck with that obnoxious Darren? Oh well! I guess you can't have everything? He is such a demerit, I should get extra credit just talking to the dwede.

 

4)

Cover letter:

Picture Britney Spears at 17-years-old and ask yourself this question: What if, after her first big summer tour and hit single, she decided to go back and finish her last year of high school? What will she do when the media waits outside her classroom and Carson Daly calls her during her history test? [Etc what if's]. These are just a few of the problems that face 17-year-old Samantha Taylor in 'Popgirl!' ... But there's more to 'Popgirl!' than just a great book. There's also music. We're offering a fully-interactive cd-rom featuring live recordings of all the songs Samantha Taylor sings in the book.

Maybe not a terrible idea, but ouch, the writing:

Dust shook loose from the ceiling and floated down to rest again on Samantha Taylor's blond hair. She could feel the sound waves wash over her body and vibrate the silver filling Dr. Crane had placed in her back tooth that one summer when she was ten years old.

Really though, does anybody else think that a story about Britney Spears going back to high school and suddenly realizing she's half vampire and Carson Daly is really a god who has lost his power and is out for revenge would be a smash hit? Or has that already been done? (Update, 2011: Actually... that would probably work great.)

 

5)

This historical novel opens with a hunter who shoots, "narrowly missing a peasant."
Poor person or a misspelled bird? Alas: "I would have killed that pigeon had you not startled me!"

 

6)

Jerry Jack gets all the toys he wanted for Christmas and invites his friends to come play, and they all say no, they can't come, they have to spend time with their families because their dad got laid off from work or their mom is in the hospital or something. So finally Jerry Jack gets the idea to give away some of his new toys to his friends, since they didn't get anything and he feels bad and a little spoiled. Wow, it feels good to give, he thinks. Near the end of this picture-book manuscript a marine comes to his house collecting for Toys for Tots, and Jerry Jack donates the last of his Christmas presents. All fine and good, so imagine my surprise when the story ends thus:

The marine says, "you've made quite a sacrifice for a little boy," and Jerry Jack says, "Sergeant, that's nothing compared to the sacrifices Jesus made for you and me."

 

7)

Mike sometimes teased her about her size, but she took it as a chance to point out how good she looked. She always said, 'who else do you know that's as fine as me at 5'10" and a size 22?'"
I actually really just love this.

 

 

III. The All-Time Best Picture Book Idea

The boy who loved his mother's vacuum cleaner too much.

Yessir, whenever his mother got the vacuum cleaner out he would hug and kiss it, and she had to pry him away every time. And she bought him toys and pets to try to displace his affection, but he would still run straight for the vacuum cleaner every time she pulled it out from the closet, kissing it madly.

I am NOT making this up.

 

 

IV. The All-Time Weirdest Letter I Received

Dear Sir

An old friend of mine one Thomas B, XXX WF Drive, BR, LA XXXXX sent me the book 'Treasure Island' by Robert Louise (sic) Stephenson and published by you. Of the 286 numbered pages all are printed in English with the exception of pages 49 to 64 and 241 to 256 inclusive, which are printed in Spanish.

I would be pleased if you could write to me and tell me what I should do as I find this unacceptable.

Yours faithfully
GM B.

 

 

V. Final Thoughts:

 

1)

Remind me never to move to western Nebraska, where, Cynthia C. tells me, "the only radio stations are country western and KSOU (playing the best in pow-wow music -- that is their slogan for real)."

 

2)

Why is it that people write stories about their dogs and then send ugly photographs of them along with the manuscript? I'm a dog person, mind you, but these photographs aren't even flattering. I'm supposed to think the dog is cute and therefore want to publish a story about it? And the stories, sadly, they're even worse than the photos.

 

3)

If I see another letter that says "the purpose of this book is to celebrate difference and what makes us each unique" it goes straight to the trash.

 

4)

Finally, I would like to tell the world of slush senders (though these are my preferences and I can't speak for other editors):

  • Send me an envelope that's easy to open.
  • Send me a SASE! Come on! You can do it, I promise. Or else tell me you don't want your MS back.
  • Send me a big SASE! When I fill ten SASEs a day it's so nice not to have to fold anything to fit it in your envelope.
  • Send me a SASE with one of those removable strips so it's easy to seal. Those are nice.
  • Don't send me your resume. I really don't care.
  • I also don't care if you're a grandmother with 4 beautiful grand kids or you've been single all your life but have 24 nieces and nephews.
  • Even if you are a grandmother, don't write a story about one. There are enough of those.
  • "My name is ____" = bad way to start a story.
  • And really, really, don't try to illustrate your story if you're not an artist. This includes illustrating it with clip art or including your child's crayon scribbles as illustrations.

 

Thanks for reading. You can also find out what I thought about some picture books that have already been published (note: last updated 2005), or check out what I've been reading lately (last updated 2007; for more recent reads, follow me on goodreads).

Last updated February 04, 2011